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What do you think is the reason why the number of COVID-19 cases there in Korea keeps on increasing?

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I think the number of COVID-19 cases in Korea keeps on increasing because of goverment's counterplan.
For instance, in Korea, the number of COVID-19 is increasing a lot, then they just make their COVID-19 level up.
Then people can't go outside freely with their friends or other people, so COVID-19's number goes down.
Then the goverment make their COVID-19 level down so people go outside with a lot of people.
So the number of COVID-19 is increasing a lot, so the goverment make the level up again.
So this is repeated a lot of time, and that's why Korea can't make down the number of COVID-19.
So I think it is better to keep COVID-19 level up, so if we do that, there will be no more COVID-19 patient.

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Hi John! ^^

After experiencing a sharp growth in COVID-19 cases early in the pandemic, South Korea rapidly controlled transmission while implementing less stringent national social distancing measures. This has led to substantial interest in their ¡°test, trace, isolate¡± strategy. 

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I think the number of COVID-19 cases in Korea keeps on increasing because of goverment's counterplan.
>> I think the number of COVID-19 cases in Korea keeps on increasing because of the government's counterplan.

For instance, in Korea, the number of COVID-19 is increasing a lot, then they just make their COVID-19 level up.
>> For instance, even thought the cases are increasing, all they do is just increase the pandemic's level.

Then people can't go outside freely with their friends or other people, so COVID-19's number goes down.
>> Then people can't go outside freely with their friends or other people to decrease the number of confirmed cases. 

Then the goverment make their COVID-19 level down so people go outside with a lot of people.
>> Then eventually, they will lower down the level again. 

So the number of COVID-19 is increasing a lot, so the goverment make the level up again.
>> And then when it increases again, they will rise the level again. 

So this is repeated a lot of time, and that's why Korea can't make down the number of COVID-19.
>> This is repeated a lot of times that's why the cases don't go down. 

So I think it is better to keep COVID-19 level up, so if we do that, there will be no more COVID-19 patient.
>> So I think it is better to keep COVID-19 level up, so if we do that, there will be no more COVID-19 patients. 

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