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The worst problem I've ever had in my life is a broken bone. I like to ride a bicycle. When I was in high school, I used to ride a bicycle to relieve my stress. But I fell down by mistake while riding a bicycle. So my collarbone is broken. I went to the emergency and was hospitalized for a week. It took about two months to get better.
In the meantime, I couldn't study properly at school. Classes and exams are very important in Korea. So I was nervous. So I ate healthy food and followed the doctor's advice to recover quickly. I studied with my eyes because I was not good at taking notes. I was able to get a good score on the test by trying so hard.

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Hi Yeong! ^^

Oh no! That sounds awful. You should be more careful in riding your bicycle. :( Good thing you're okay now. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The worst problem I've ever had in my life is a broken bone. 
>> The worst problem I've ever had in my life is having a broken bone. 

I like to ride a bicycle. 
>> CORRECT

When I was in high school, I used to ride a bicycle to relieve my stress. 
>> CORRECT

But I fell down by mistake while riding a bicycle. 
>> CORRECT

So my collarbone is broken. 
>> So my collarbone got broken. 

I went to the emergency and was hospitalized for a week. 
>> CORRECT

It took about two months to get better.
>> CORRECT

In the meantime, I couldn't study properly at school. 
>>In the meantime, I couldn't study properly in school. 

Classes and exams are very important in Korea. 
>> Classes and exams are very important in Korea so I was nervous since I couldn't attend any. 

So I was nervous. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

So I ate healthy food and followed the doctor's advice to recover quickly. 
>> CORRECT

I studied with my eyes because I was not good at taking notes. 
>> I studied with my eyes because I wasn't able to take down notes. 

I was able to get a good score on the test by trying so hard.
>> CORRECT
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