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What do you think is the reason why the number of COVID-19 cases there in Korea keeps on increasing?

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Now the korea most 20~30s are increase. and many people still gather in everywhere. so now seoul is social distancing step4 so serious. yesterday, I watched the news that 400 cars demonstrate. because they are so hard. I understand them. So government make new quarantine systems. No matter how raise the level, people gathering must gather them. I wish many people get a vaccine.

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Hi Won! ^^

Oh no! That sounds awful. This is why we should be very careful when going outside. The pandemic is getting worse and worse. Keep safe 

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Now the korea most 20~30s are increase. and many people still gather in everywhere. 
>> Now in Korea, most of the people getting infected are in their mid 20s and 30s and yet they still gather everywhere. 

so now seoul is social distancing step4 so serious.
>> In Seoul, social distancing should be 4 steps away from one another. 

 yesterday, I watched the news that 400 cars demonstrate. because they are so hard. 
>> Yesterday I watched the news and there were 400 cars outside. 

I understand them. 
>> CORRECT

So government make new quarantine systems. 
>> This is why the government made new quarantine systems. 

No matter how raise the level, people gathering must gather them. 
>> No matter how much they raise the level, people still go outside and gather together. 

I wish many people get a vaccine.
>> I wish many people will get the vaccine already. 
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