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Koreans really hated doing something alone. We really don't like eating alone especially because we consider others sight a lot. We don't want to be look like that we don't have friends or be lonely. However, people have been changed these days that they prefer to spend their time alone because they can save their time and do many things. We believe that doing something with other people is make them happier than doing it alone. We are living under the media flood that need people to select and focus the information they are interested in. We used to go to the cinema to watch movies but we don't have to visit there because there are a lot of streaming services which can be used anywhere and any time if we subscribe it. Regarding TV channels, there were few channels when I was young but we have more than hundred channels these days that might be difficult to choose. These options provide people to save their time but I am worried about socializing skill that people have to improve.

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Hi there Mr. Hwang~!^^ Thank you for doing your homework as always. Keep it up!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Koreans really hate doing something alone. 
>>> CORRECT
We really don't like eating alone especially because we consider others sight a lot. 
>>> CORRECT
We don't want to be look like that we don't have friends or be lonely.
>>> We don't want to look like we don't have friends or lonely.
 However, people have been changed these days that they prefer to spend their time alone because they can save their time and do many things.
>>>  However, people have been changing these days that they prefer to spend their time alone because they can save their time and do many things.
 We believe that doing something with other people is make them happier than doing it alone. 
>>>  We believe that doing something with other people can make them happier than doing it alone. 
We are living under the media flood that need people to select and focus the information they are interested in.
>>> We are living under the media flood which need people to select and focus the information they are interested in.
 We used to go to the cinema to watch movies but we don't have to visit there because there are a lot of streaming services which can be used anywhere and any time if we subscribe it. 
>>> CORRECT
Regarding TV channels, there were few channels when I was young but we have more than hundred channels these days that might be difficult to choose.
>>> Regarding TV channels, there were a few channels when I was young but we have more than hundred channels these days that might be difficult to choose.
 These options provide people to save their time but I am worried about socializing skills that people have to improve.
>>> CORRECT

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