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Korea covid-19 increase reason
First, many people want covid-19 vaccine but, government don't have enough vaccine.
Second, when covid-19 was decreaseing, government announced wrong policy.
suddenly, regulation permited.

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Hi Hyeon! ^^

Oh no! That sounds awful. This is why we should be very careful when going outside. The pandemic is getting worse and worse. Keep safe 

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Korea covid-19 increase reason
>> COVID-19 cases are increasing because of may reasons. 

First, many people want covid-19 vaccine but, government don't have enough vaccine.
>> First, many people want to get the vaccine but the government doesn't have enough for everyone. 

Second, when covid-19 was decreaseing, government announced wrong policy.
>> Second is that when the cases got higher, the government implemented wrong policies. 

suddenly, regulation permited.
>> All of a sudden, regulations are already permitted. 
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