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Has technology made our lives easier or more complicated?

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Yes, I think Work we don¡¯t replaced technology.
We has more convenient and easier according to technology. Technology more cheaper than people. So we are losing job. This make complicate in our life.

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Hi Won! ^^

Some people say that technology has complicated our lifestyle, but in most cases, it has been beneficial in terms of making life convenient. Firstly, it has made human life very easy, especially related to connecting with friends and their loved ones and sharing content and info around the world easily.

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Yes, I think Work we don¡¯t replaced technology.
>> Yes, I think we shouldn't replace technology. 

We has more convenient and easier according to technology. 
>> Our lives has been more convenient and easier because of technology.

Technology more cheaper than people.
>> Using technology can be cheaper than hiring people. 

 So we are losing job. 
>> This is why people are loosing jobs. 

This make complicate in our life.
>> This makes our lived more complicated. 
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