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My parents can give me advice or advice about my dream or this job, but "I wish I could do this job". I don't think it's forcing. Among the things that I am good at and I like, most of my parents recommend that I be good at what I am good at, but I think I should make what I love as a profession. If you do what you love, your future work will not only be fun, but it will also have the potential to develop further. I gave up on becoming a diplomat because of my lack of skills, but in fact, a police officer also needs to study very well to get in. Seoul National University and the National Police University, the top universities in Korea, can be seen as standing shoulder to shoulder. Also, National Police University focuses on Korean, English, and social studies. These words from Alice helped me a lot before I found a job as a police officer, when I had just given up on my dream of being a diplomat. ¡°Not knowing where you want to go means you can choose any path.¡±

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Hello Maria!

Choosing where you want to go and being great at it makes you learn so many things. Perhaps, if you choose other paths, you may also be happy and successful. However, you will never know that anymore. Choosing something and doing your best about it makes you feel joyful as there is contentment in this path.

So in whatever you choose, do your best and always be happy about it. 

Thanks for choosing to do this composition. I am happy to read and suggest some things to make it better all the time!

-T. Donna  =)

My parents can give me advice or advice about my dream or this job, but "I wish I could do this job". 
>> Correct!

I don't think it's forcing. 
>> Correct!

Among the things that I am good at and I like, most of my parents recommend that I be good at what I am good at, but I think I should make what I love as a profession. 
>> Among the things that I am good at and I like most of my parents recommend is that I can be good at what I am good at but I think I should do what I love as a profession. 

If you do what you love, your future work will not only be fun, but it will also have the potential to develop further. 
>> Correct!

I gave up on becoming a diplomat because of my lack of skills, but in fact, a police officer also needs to study very well to get in. 
>> Correct!

Seoul National University and the National Police University, the top universities in Korea, can be seen as standing shoulder to shoulder. 
>> Correct!

Also, National Police University focuses on Korean, English, and social studies. 
>> Also, the National Police University focuses on Korean, English, and social studies.  

These words from Alice helped me a lot before I found a job as a police officer, when I had just given up on my dream of being a diplomat. 
>> Correct!

¡°Not knowing where you want to go means you can choose any path.¡±
>> Correct!
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