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Has technology made our lives easier or more complicated? Explain your answer.

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The technologies in our lives made us very easier and more complicated than before.
First, like smart phones or computers, we can use it anywhere and we can communicate each other through these digital devices.
But second, the system of our society is going very complicated, so if we want to use the technologies, we have to learn.
And there are so many adventages and disadventages, so I think we can't say that the technologies in our lives made the lives easier.

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Hi John! ^^

Some people say that technology has complicated our lifestyle, but in most cases, it has been beneficial in terms of making life convenient. Firstly, it has made human life very easy, especially related to connecting with friends and their loved ones and sharing content and info around the world easily.

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The technologies in our lives made us very easier and more complicated than before.
>> Technology has made our lives easier yet more complicated that before. 

First, like smart phones or computers, we can use it anywhere and we can communicate each other through these digital devices.
>>We have smart phones and computers. We can use them anywhere. It is used to communicate with other people. 

But second, the system of our society is going very complicated, so if we want to use the technologies, we have to learn.
>>Despite those, the system of our society is starting to get very complicated. If we want to operate these things, we need to learn how to. 

And there are so many adventages and disadventages, so I think we can't say that the technologies in our lives made the lives easier.
>> There are so many advantages and disadvantages so I think we can't say that it has made our lives easier nor  complicated. 
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