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Are you a spender or a saver of money? Why?

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I'm a spender. Because I don't spare money for food and new experiences. My family went to different regions every weekend to eat delicious food. My family always spared no money for eating and new experiences. Thanks to this, I was able to taste various foods and experience various things.

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Hi Yeong! ^^

Both are okay as long as you handle your expenses wisely. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.


I'm a spender. Because I don't spare money for food and new experiences. 
>> I am a spender because I don't spare money for food and new experiences. 

My family went to different regions every weekend to eat delicious food. 
>> My family goes to different regions every weekend to eat delicious food. 

My family always spared no money for eating and new experiences. 
>> My family spares no money for eating and new experiences. 

Thanks to this, I was able to taste various foods and experience various things.
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