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I would like to travel to Japan next.
I lived in Kyoto for two years, and it was my first chance to live abroad.
When I traveled to Japan before, I thought Japanese culture and environment are very similar to Korea.
However, I felt a lot of differences between the two countries during living in Japan.
It was really interesting.
I need two months to be familiar with the Japanese lifestyle.
Interestingly, human is adaptive being.
When I came back to Korea after two years, I felt uncomfortable for a while.
I need about two months to be familiar with Korea again.
Sometimes, I want to go to Kyoto again, and just walk and feel the past vibes.
I had many experiences there, happiness, sadness, loneliness, and so on.
After finish COVID-19, I will go to Kyoto firstly with my husband.
I really hope to go there as soon as possible.

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I would like to travel to Japan next.

>> I would to travel to Japan next.
I lived in Kyoto for two years, and it was my first chance to live abroad.

>> I lived in Kyoto for two years, and it was my first time to live abroad.
When I traveled to Japan before, I thought Japanese culture and environment are very similar to Korea.

>> When I went to Japan, I thought their culture and environment would be similar to Korea.
However, I felt a lot of differences between the two countries during living in Japan.

>> However, I felt that there were a lot of differences between the two countries while I was living in Japan.
It was really interesting.

>> It was really interesting.
I need two months to be familiar with the Japanese lifestyle.

>> I needed two months to get used to the Japanese lifestyle.
Interestingly, human is adaptive being.

>> Interestingly, humans are adaptive.
When I came back to Korea after two years, I felt uncomfortable for a while.

>> When I went back to Korea, I felt uncomfortable for a while.
I need about two months to be familiar with Korea again.

>> I needed two months to get used to Korea again.
Sometimes, I want to go to Kyoto again, and just walk and feel the past vibes.

>> Sometimes, I want to go back to Kyoto, and just walk and feel the atmosphere.
I had many experiences there, happiness, sadness, loneliness, and so on.

>> I had a lot of experiences and emotions felt while I was there.
After finish COVID-19, I will go to Kyoto firstly with my husband.

>>After COVID-19, I will go to Kyoto first with my husband.
I really hope to go there as soon as possible.

>> I really hope that I can visit Japan soon.

 

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