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If one song were to describe your life, What song would it be?

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I can't think one song describe my life. But, 'À̹«Áø-traffic lights' song can describe my worry. This song is about we are going anywhere now, but we can't sure where are we going. But I'm not sure what do I want and what do i do in this age. So this song can describe my worry.

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Hi, Minji!

I really appreciate your effort in sharing that as well as in always answering my questions. I guess that song really hit you hard. It's sounds sad, but I hope you find the right path that you want to take. Don't worry, every hardship that you are experiencing now, will be replaced with good results in the future. Just keep hanging! You can do it~

Thank you for sharing and have a nice day!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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1. I can't think one song describe my life. But, 'À̹«Áø-traffic lights' song can describe my worry.
>> I can't think of one song that can describe my life, but  'À̹«Áø-traffic lights' song can describe my worries.

2. This song is about we are going anywhere now, but we can't sure where are we going. 
>>  This song is about us going anywhere now, but we aren't sure where are we going. 

3. But I'm not sure what do I want and what do i do in this age. So this song can describe my worry
>> But I'm not sure what do I want and what do I need in this age, so this song describes my worries.
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