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HOMEWORK:
What are some reasons why privacy is important for you?

No one will want someone to watch what they are doing for 24hours.
If we live a social life then we need time to live our private life that is not exposed to everyone.
I don't want to reveal my days to other people every time.
Every people have at least one thing that they don't want other people to see.
For instance, our bare body, our house clothes, and our lifestyles can be anything.
Even entertainers don't want their privacy to be revealed.
Therefore they restrict the reporters nor why will they act like that?
It is all because to protect their privacy.
Even at home, there is privacy for each family member.
It is obvious who would ever let people see their privacy.
No one can't see us for 24hours cause there is privacy and privacy is important.

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Hello Claire!
Good job with the compositions today! ^^
~~Teacher Kate

No one will want someone to watch what they are doing for 24hours.
>>CORRECT!
If we live a social life then we need time to live our private life that is not exposed to everyone.
>>CORRECT!
I don't want to reveal my days to other people every time.
>>I don't want to reveal my daily life to other people every time.
Every people have at least one thing that they don't want other people to see.
>>Every one has at least one thing that they don't want other people to see.
For instance, our bare body, our house clothes, and our lifestyles can be anything.
>>CORRECT!
Even entertainers don't want their privacy to be revealed.
>>Even entertainers don't want their privacy to be disturbed.
Therefore they restrict the reporters nor why will they act like that?
>>Therefore, they restrict the reporters because why would they act like that?
It is all because to protect their privacy.
>>It is all to protect their privacy.
Even at home, there is privacy for each family member.
>>CORRECT!
It is obvious who would ever let people see their privacy.
>>It is obvious. Who would ever let people ruin their privacy?
No one can't see us for 24hours cause there is privacy and privacy is important.
>>No one can see us for 24 hours because we need to have some privacy and privacy is important.
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