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Being parents

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In my opinion, both are really difficult.
If we have to choose one, it's probably harder to be a father than to be a mother.
That's why motherhood is born, but fatherhood is raised.
Therefore, to be a good father have to try more than mother.
It is not easy to be a good father in my country.
In order to gain recognition at work, the role of father will be neglected.
Perhaps the hardest thing is to balance the role of the work and the parents as father.

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Hi Eun Ha!
This is definitely a topic worth discussing.
Let's talk more about it in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
In my opinion, both are really difficult.
>> Correct
If we have to choose one, it's probably harder to be a father than to be a mother.
>> Correct
That's why motherhood is born, but fatherhood is raised.
>> Correct
Therefore, to be a good father have to try more than mother.
>> Therefore, fathers have to put in more effort than mothers do. 
It is not easy to be a good father in my country.
>> Correct
In order to gain recognition at work, the role of father will be neglected.
>> In order to gain recognition at work, the role of a father could be neglected.
Perhaps the hardest thing is to balance the role of the work and the parents as father.
>> Perhaps the hardest thing is to balance their role at work and role as a father.
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