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HOMEWORK: ESSAY: Do you think smoking areas should be totally gone? Explain.

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I don't think completely disappear smoking areas. Because smoker can't suddenly stop smoking. If the smoking areas completely disappear, I think they are more smoking than there was smoking areas. therefore, I think it's good to have smoking areas.

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Hello Min Seo,

Thank you for taking time to answer your homework only proves that you are really serious in improving your English skill. 
Please do check the corrections and hope it helped you. If you have any concerns, just do ask me about it. 

Have a wonderful night!

Your truly,
Teacher Annie




ESSAY: Do you think smoking areas should be totally gone? Explain.

I don't think completely disappear smoking areas. Because smoker can't suddenly stop smoking. 
>>> I don't think that the complete disappearance of smoking areas would help because smokers cannot suddenly stop smoking that easily.

If the smoking areas completely disappear, I think they are more smoking than there was smoking areas. 
>>> I think a lot of people will smoke anywhere if smoking areas will be completely gone, even in public places. 

therefore, I think it's good to have smoking areas.
>>> Therefore, I think it's good to have smoking areas; better than not having any.

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