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If endangered species breeding programs is people want
endangered species must go back into the wild.
because of people damage nature endangered species Occurred.
people must nature love.

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Hi Hyeon! ^^

Plants and animals maintain the health of an ecosystem. And, when species become endangered, it¡¯s a sign that an ecosystem is out of balance. This is why we should keep our environment healthy for no species to be extinct. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If endangered species breeding programs is people want endangered species must go back into the wild.
>> People shouldn't keep endangered species in breeding programs. These animals should be release into the wild. 

because of people damage nature endangered species Occurred.
>> It is because people are the ones who bring damage to nature causing some animals to be endangered. 

people must nature love.
>> People must love nature. 
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