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If i make me own holiday, i will go to travel
Because i love travel.
I want to celebrate on travel me own holiday.
Because, travel is my favorite.
In travel if me own holiday celebrate i will happy.

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Hi Hyeon! ^^

Wow! That's a great choice! I think that would be a great holiday that you will enjoy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

 If i make me own holiday, i will go to travel
>> If I can make my own holiday, I will go traveling because I love to do that. 

Because i love travel.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

I want to celebrate on travel me own holiday.
>> I want to celebrate by traveling on my holiday. 

Because, travel is my favorite.
>> IT IS ALREADY REDUNDANT. 

In travel if me own holiday celebrate i will happy.
>> I will be happy if I travel on this holiday. 
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