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Many people want to live in places with beautiful views.
I absolutely don't.
That is because what we can see is not the whole world.
However I think it's better to live close to nature than dry cities.
If we can see the wide blue sea every time we wake up in the morning, we're likely to feel good.

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Hi Eun Ha!
This is fantastic work!
It's even better because I know how busy you are.
I hope things get better with you soon.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Many people want to live in places with beautiful views.
>> Correct
I absolutely don't.
>> Correct
That is because what we can see is not the whole world.
>> Correct
However I think it's better to live close to nature than dry cities.
>> Correct
If we can see the wide blue sea every time we wake up in the morning, we're likely to feel good.
>> Correct
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