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I think it's better to work in other country. Because working in other countries helps us broaden our perspective. We can experience various cultures and environments in different countries. In addition, we can communicate with various people and think in a new direction. Therefore, it is more beneficial to work in other countries than in Korea.

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Hi Yeong! ^^

There are many reasons why working abroad will benefit both yourself personally, and your career. Two of the most obvious (yet still important) are: Better career opportunities and prospects: Depending on your skill set, there may be a greater range of career opportunities open to you outside your home market.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon..

I think it's better to work in other country. Because working in other countries helps us broaden our perspective. 
>> I think it's better to work in other country because it helps us broaden our perspective. 

We can experience various cultures and environments in different countries. 
>> CORRECT

In addition, we can communicate with various people and think in a new direction. 
>> CORRECT

Therefore, it is more beneficial to work in other countries than in Korea.
>> CORRECT
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