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What would you say is the best time of year to visit your town or city? Why?

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Our country has 4 seasons. I like spring and autumn the most. As the global worming, my country has also effected. It is humid in summer these days that was not before. It is annoyed to take a trip in the hot weather. Korea is well known of beautiful environment, palace in Seoul and K-pop. Many foreigners would like to visit to see K-pop concert and travel the places which is showed on K-drama. Tourists also give a try to eat Korean food because they want to know about the culture. There are 3 oceans around my country and it is faced to North Korea at North. Seoul is metropolitan area, so people can see how Korea is developed and there are a lot of mountains in rural areas which is good to travel. We can see colorful leafs on the mountain in autumn and If it is summer, I recommend people to visit to Jeju island because it is warmer than main land. People can enjoy swimming and many activities in the sea.

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Good morning Seha! 
Thank you very much for sending your homework today. 
I would definitely visit Korea during spring season, because I can't stand hot weather - hahaha. 
I hope this pandemic would be over, so that I would be able to visit Korea soon :) 

Our country has 4 seasons. 
>>> CORRECT! 
I like spring and autumn the most. 
>>> CORRECT! 
As the global worming, my country has also effected. 
>>> Our country was also affected by global warming.
It is humid in summer these days that was not before. 
>>> It's humid these days, when it wasn't like before.
It is annoyed to take a trip in the hot weather. 
>>> It's annoying to go on a trip in hot weather.
Korea is well known of beautiful environment, palace in Seoul and K-pop. 
>>> Korea is well known for its beautiful environment, Seoul's palace, and K-pop.
Many foreigners would like to visit to see K-pop concert and travel the places which is showed on K-drama. 
>>> Many foreigners want to see K-pop concerts and travel to places in K-drama.
Tourists also give a try to eat Korean food because they want to know about the culture.  
>>> Tourists also try Korean food because they want to know about Korean culture.
There are 3 oceans around my country and it is faced to North Korea at North. 
>>> There are three seas around our country and there are seas in North Korea.
Seoul is metropolitan area, so people can see how Korea is developed and there are a lot of mountains in rural areas which is good to travel. 
>>> Seoul is a metropolitan area, so you can see the development of Korea and it is good to travel in the countryside because there are many mountains.
We can see colorful leafs on the mountain in autumn and If it is summer, I recommend people to visit to Jeju island because it is warmer than main land. 
>>> In autumn, you can see colorful leaves in the mountains and if it's summer, I recommend you to visit Jeju Island because it's warmer than the mainland.
People can enjoy swimming and many activities in the sea.
>>> CORRECT! 

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