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I like cozy movie. My favorite movie is 'Little Forest'. When I see that movie, my feeling is comfortable. This movie did not played the villain anyone. The make and eat delicious food and played in the country. My grandparents lived in Seoul, so I didn't went to grandmother's house in the country. Be I want to visit in the country. and I want to live in the country when I was old. Because In the city life is very busy and hard. But in the country life is more freely.

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Hello Min Ji! Thank you for this essay. You did well, I also want to live a care free life in the country. There are a few mistakes in grammar, however these are easily corrected. Keep on improving!

- Teacher Ivy :)

 

I like cozy movie.

>> I like a cozy movie

My favorite movie is 'Little Forest'.

>> My favorite movie is the 'Little Forest'.

When I see that movie, my feeling is comfortable.

>>When I see that movie, I feel comfortable

This movie did not played the villain anyone.

>>This movie did not have any villain.

The make and eat delicious food and played in the country.

>>They make and eat delicious food, and played in the country.

My grandparents lived in Seoul, so I didn't went to grandmother's house in the country.

>>My grandparents lived in Seoul, so I didn't go to grandmother's house in the country.

Be I want to visit in the country and I want to live in the country when I was old.

>>I want to visit the country and live there when I¡¯m old.

Because In the city life is very busy and hard.

>> Because the city life is hard and busy.

But in the country life is more freely.

>> But in the country, life is more free

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