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Which one do you think is better, working in Korea or working in a different country? Explain your a

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In my opinion, I think working in Korea is better than working in a different country.
First, Korea is my home country, so I can communicate with them very natuarally with Korea language.
Second, Korea is low birth rate while a lot of jobs are made.
Because of it, we can get a job more easly than a different country.
And third, my country, Korea improving a lot of technologies.
So I think working in Korea is better than working in a different country.

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Hi John! ^^

There are many reasons why working abroad will benefit both yourself personally, and your career. Two of the most obvious (yet still important) are: Better career opportunities and prospects: Depending on your skill set, there may be a greater range of career opportunities open to you outside your home market.

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In my opinion, I think working in Korea is better than working in a different country.
>> CORRECT

First, Korea is my home country, so I can communicate with them very natuarally with Korea language.
>>First, Korea is my home country so I can communicate with them very naturally with the Korean language.

Second, Korea is low birth rate while a lot of jobs are made.
>>
Second, Korea has a low birth rate while a lot of jobs are made.

Because of it, we can get a job more easly than a different country.
>>Because of it, we can get a job more easily here than a different country.

And third, my country, Korea improving a lot of technologies.
>> Technologies here are also improving a lot. 

So I think working in Korea is better than working in a different country.
>> CORRECT
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