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I think the color of happiness is yellow.
Because yellow is bright. That's why I like bright yellow. But you can't think of brown or black as the color of happiness, can you..? I think I generally like bright colors. That's why I like white and yellow the most.
My mom thinks transparent is the color of happiness. Because happiness cannot be expressed in color. That's right!! Happiness is happiness! And my dad says happiness is blue! Because when he sees blue, he feels comfortable and he is happy when he feels comfortable.

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Hello Jenny!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think the color of happiness is yellow. Because yellow is bright. 

>> I think the color of happiness is yellow because yellow is bright. 

That's why I like bright yellow. 

>> CORRECT!

But you can't think of brown or black as the color of happiness, can you..? 

>> But you can't think of brown or black as the color of happiness, can you? 

I think I generally like bright colors. That's why I like white and yellow the most.

>> I think I generally like bright colors that's why I like white and yellow the most.
My mom thinks transparent is the color of happiness. Because happiness cannot be expressed in color. That's right!! 

>> My mom thinks transparent is the color of happiness because happiness cannot be expressed in color, that's right!! 

Happiness is happiness! 

>> CORRECT!

And my dad says happiness is blue! Because when he sees blue, he feels comfortable and he is happy when he feels comfortable.

>> My dad says happiness is the color blue, because when he sees this color, he feels comfortable and he is happy when he feels comfortable.

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