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Writing: What do you think is the safest way to send some confidential information?

To securely send confidential information, I think relying on a sending method would not be as safe as it has to be. Therefore, to avoid any unfortunate situations, using two different methods could be safer to make sure the information arrives in time.

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Hello Jimin! 

I had a great time listening to your funny episodes.  You tend to express yourself well in English when you are in a funny situation.  Keep on sharing good, bad, or even the strangest thing you have experienced. :)


-T. Maine


HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing: What do you think is the safest way to send some confidential information?

 To securely send confidential information, I think relying on a sending method would not be as safe as it has to be.

>>Correct! :)

Therefore, to avoid any unfortunate situations, using two different methods could be safer to make sure the information arrives in time.

>> Correct!

>>OR: Using two different methods could be safer to make sure the information arrives on time.


On time is used to mean at the specific time.

In time means early enough.

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