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Different country work is better Korea work.
Because, Korea work is very hard.
hard reason is Various.
First In the old days many people did night overtime.
Nowadays, young people don't do night overtime. because young people want work life balance.
but, past generation people don't understand. because past generation life is work.
Second, Korea work office exist sex discrimination.
Men have higher positions women. reason is just man.

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Hi Hyeon! ^^

There are many reasons why working abroad will benefit both yourself personally, and your career. Two of the most obvious (yet still important) are: Better career opportunities and prospects: Depending on your skill set, there may be a greater range of career opportunities open to you outside your home market.

We have different reasons why we want to work in other countries. Some people prefer working in their home countries as well. Either way, it still depends on what suits you and your family depending on your needs as well. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Different country work is better Korea work.
>> Working in a different country is better than working here in Korea. 

Because, Korea work is very hard.
>> It's because working here is hard. 

hard reason is Various.
>> It is hard in various reasons. 

First In the old days many people did night overtime.
>> Back then, people used to work over time. 

Nowadays, young people don't do night overtime. because young people want work life balance.
>> Nowadays, young people don't do that anymore and has work and life balance already. 

but, past generation people don't understand. because past generation life is work.
>> But older people don't understand how they do it. 

Second, Korea work office exist sex discrimination.
>> Another reason is that there is gender discrimination when you work in offices here. 

Men have higher positions women. reason is just man.
>> Men have higher positions women.

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