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What is are differences between education in Korea and education abroad?

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I don't know because I've never been to school abroad. I think Korea studies sedentary more than physical exercise. On the other hand, I think foreign countries have a lot of exercise or leisure time. For example, self-study at night in Korea is an example.

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Hi Yun! ^^

Both of them have different ways. That's true. 

Studying in your home country has many advantages. First of all, you do not have to plan a temporary stay abroad and learn another language. So you can fully focus on your studies instead of learning vocabulary

Studying abroad helps you to learn new languages, appreciate other cultures, overcome challenges of living in another country and gain a greater understanding of the world. These are all things that modern businesses look for when hiring, and such traits will only become more important in the future.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't know because I've never been to school abroad. 
>> CORRECT

I think Korea studies sedentary more than physical exercise. 
>>I think in Korea, we study sedentary more than physical exercise. 

On the other hand, I think foreign countries have a lot of exercise or leisure time. 
>>On the other hand, I think foreign countries have classes that requires a lot of exercise or leisure time. 

For example, self-study at night in Korea is an example.
>> For example, self-studying at night in Korea is a common thing. 

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