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English Speaking Test

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2021-07-30 178

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Niagara Falls is a place I want to visit at least once.
Niagara Falls is the strongest of North American waterfalls.
Let me introduce why I want to go there in connection with this.
First,it was the most beautiful waterfall I've ever seen on the Internet.
When the water was pouring down, the charm of the Niagara Falls was fantastic.
Second,I saw people sightseeing there on TV and it looked very interesting.
It looked so good for them to have a happy time in the water.
I'll introduce what I really want to do there next in this regard.
First, I want to take a commemorative photo with my family and make a memory.
Second, when a boat gets close to the waterfall,I'd like to go to a place where there's a lot of water.
I hope the day I travel with my family will be such a happy time as I imagined.

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Hi, Sarah!

Thank you for submitting your script! 
You did well on this one. I just also provided some suggestions. 
I hope this helps. ^^

See you later! Have a good day! 

~Teacher Gina


Niagara Falls is a place I want to visit at least once.
>> CORRECT.
Niagara Falls is the strongest of North American waterfalls.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Niagara Falls has the strongest current among North American waterfalls.
Let me introduce why I want to go there in connection with this.
>> CORRECT.
First, it was the most beautiful waterfall I've ever seen on the Internet.
>> CORRECT.
When the water was pouring down, the charm of the Niagara Falls was fantastic.
>> When the water was pouring down, the charm of Niagara Falls was fantastic.
Second, I saw people sightseeing there on TV and it looked very interesting.
>> CORRECT.
It looked so good for them to have a happy time in the water.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It looked so good seeing them have a happy time in the water.
I'll introduce what I really want to do there next in this regard.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: In this regard, I'll tell you the things I want to do there.
First, I want to take a commemorative photo with my family and make a memory.
>> CORRECT.
Second, when a boat gets close to the waterfall, I'd like to go to a place where there's a lot of water.
>> Second, I'd like to go to a place where there's a lot of water when the boat gets close to the waterfall.
I hope the day I travel with my family will be such a happy time as I imagined.
>> CORRECT.
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