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What do you think is the most important subject? Explain your answer.

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I think morality is the most important subject but almost students are moral people so the next important subject is science.
If we heard this, some of people may think that science is not that important but nowadays, science is very very important subject.
The science were developed by people and because of it, Earth's environments are polluted.
And we have to fix our planet's environments for us and for after generation.
So I think we have to develope our science, and if we want to develope our science, we have to study it.
So I think science is the most important subject next to the morality.

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Hi John! ^^

People overwhelmingly say math has been the most valuable subject in their lives, with English and science essentially tied for second. All subjects are important still. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think morality is the most important subject but almost students are moral people so the next important subject is science.
>>I think Morality is the most important subject but most students know the basics already so the next most important subject is Science.

If we heard this, some of people may think that science is not that important but nowadays, science is very very important subject.
>> Some of people may think that Science is not that important but nowadays, it is a very important subject.

The science were developed by people and because of it, Earth's environments are polluted.
>> Science were developed by people and at some point it made the environment polluted. 

And we have to fix our planet's environments for us and for after generation.
>> We have to fix our planet's environment for us and future generations. 

So I think we have to develope our science, and if we want to develope our science, we have to stu
dy it.
>>So I think we have to develop Science more and study it. 

So I think science is the most important subject next to the morality.
>>So I think Science is the most important subject next to Morality.

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