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All leaders in the world declared that they will try to reduce the greenhouse gas which is the main cause of global warming. As part of the plans, many leaders announced that their government will support the industry which is running eco-friendly business, for instance, batteries for electric cars, wind power plants and hydrogen gas. There are countless natural disasters happened around the world these days. We haven't experienced these earthquake, floods and typhoon. It might not happen if we have tried to prevent the environment. I think It has boosted since the industrial revolution. It is true that most devices and electronics make our live convenient and we might not be able to live without these inventions. However, if we don't stop to use fossil fuels to make various products, there will be crisis in this world in near future because burning fossil fuels is the major source to create carbon dioxide. I strongly support world's movements about solving environmental problems.

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Hi there Mr. Hwang! Thanks for the class today. I always enjoy your company. :) Anyway, I'm grateful because you're always trying to express yourself no matter what. Keep improving!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
All leaders in the world declared that they will try to reduce the greenhouse gas which is the main cause of global warming. 
>>> CORRECT
As part of the plans, many leaders announced that their government will support the industry which is running eco-friendly business, for instance, batteries for electric cars, wind power plants and hydrogen gas.
>>> CORRECT
 There are countless natural disasters happened around the world these days.
>>>  There are countless of natural disasters happening around the world these days.
 We haven't experienced these earthquake, floods and typhoon.
>>> CORRECT
 It might not happen if we have tried to prevent the environment.
>>> CORRECT
 I think It has boosted since the industrial revolution.
>>> CORRECT
 It is true that most devices and electronics make our live convenient and we might not be able to live without these inventions.
>>> CORRECT
 However, if we don't stop to use fossil fuels to make various products, there will be crisis in this world in  the near future because burning fossil fuels is the major source to create carbon dioxide.
>>> CORRECT
 I strongly support the world's movements about solving environmental problems.
>>> CORRECT
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