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There is one thing that i remember. That was when I was in high school. In my hometown, Busan, lnternational film festival(BIFF) is held every year. I used to participate every year in my teens. Because I love movies. And it was nice to be able to see a movie star. BIFF season used to overlap to my test period. So I finished school early and ran to the BIFF with my friend. We were able to get opening tickets. We waited about 2 hours for tickets. But we sold the tickets because we thought that opening hole is too wide to see well a movie star. We were supposed to go to a red carpet. But I regretted it as soon as it was sold. I sill reget that decision.

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Hello Chloe!
Your writing was done really well today! Thank you for your effort in writing the composition. See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate

There is one thing that i remember. 
>>CORRECT!
That was when I was in high school. 
>>CORRECT!
In my hometown, Busan, lnternational film festival(BIFF) is held every year. 
>>In my hometown, Busan, the International film festival(BIFF) is held every year. 
I used to participate every year in my teens. Because I love movies. 
>>I used to participate every year, in my teens, because I love movies. 
And it was nice to be able to see a movie star. 
>>CORRECT!
BIFF season used to overlap to my test period. So I finished school early and ran to the BIFF with my friend. 
>>BIFF season used to overlap with my testing period so I finished school early and ran to the BIFF venue with my friend. 
We were able to get opening tickets. 
>>CORRECT!
We waited about 2 hours for tickets. 
>>CORRECT!
But we sold the tickets because we thought that opening hole is too wide to see well a movie star. 
>>But we sold the tickets because we thought that opening was too wide to see a movie star well. 
We were supposed to go to a red carpet. But I regretted it as soon as it was sold. 
>>CORRECT!
I sill regret that decision.
>>CORRECT!
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