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How do you think can the culture in Korea be preserved for many generations to come?

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It can preserved by studying history of Korea. Because unless we unrighteous or overuse our cultures, we have to know history correctly. Moreover, we have to announce our cultures all over the world.

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Hi Yun! ^^

The best way to preserve your culture is to keep it alive. Gather as a group not just for holidays, but for ordinary meals, events, or just conversation. Many aspects of culture are difficult to learn in books and museums, including etiquette, body language, and humor.

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It can preserved by studying history of Korea. Because unless we unrighteous or overuse our cultures, we have to know history correctly.
>>It can preserved by studying the history of Korea. Unless we are unrighteous, we have to know the history correctly.

Moreover, we have to announce our cultures all over the world.
>>Moreover, we have to announce our culture all over the world.

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