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Theme: [ESSAY] What's your thought on the Tokyo Olympics medal tally?
I admit that China is on the 1st medal tally.
US and Japen too.
They all have so many good athlete and they have many people to attend at Olympics.
But, I'm not understood in Australia. Australia is on 4th.
I'm not understood. Australia isn't so big country and there aren't so many well-known athletes.
I'm not understood! : (

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                           Theme: [ESSAY] What's your thought on the Tokyo Olympics medal tally?


I admit that China is on the 1st medal tally.
>> I must admit or acknowledge that China placed 1st on the medal tally. 

US and Japen too. [Note the spelling of "Japan".]
>> The US and Japan bagged more medals than my country as well. 

They all have so many good athlete and they have many people to attend at Olympics.
>> They all have so many good athletes and they have many people that can join the Olympics.

But, I'm not understood in Australia. Australia is on 4th.
>> But, I don't understand why Australia placed 4th.

I'm not understood. 
>> I honestly don't get it. 

Australia isn't so big country and there aren't so many well-known athletes.
>> Australia isn't really a big country and there aren't so many well-known athletes.

I'm not understood! : (
>> I don't understand. 
>> or: I wonder how they did it.
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