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Who has inspired you the most? How did he or she inspire you?

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I can say it with 100% confidence. It's my mother.
I'm really familiar with my mom. We are like best friends so I tell her everything about my work, my worries, my feelings.
She always listens carefully to me, encourage me to work harder, and try to comfort me.
She doesn't force me to do well or do best. She doesn't give me a burden to do some things but I know she always support and endorse me. She is my reliable supporter.

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Hello Christine!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I can say it with 100% confidence. It's my mother.

>> I can say it with 100% confidence, it's my mother.
I'm really familiar with my mom. 

>> CORRECT!

We are like best friends so I tell her everything about my work, my worries, my feelings.

>> CORRECT!
She always listens carefully to me, encourage me to work harder, and try to comfort me.

>> She always listens carefully to me, encourages me to work harder, and tries to comfort me.
She doesn't force me to do well or do best. 

>> She doesn't force me to do well or to do my best. 

She doesn't give me a burden to do some things but I know she always support and endorse me. 

>> She doesn't give me a burden to do some things but I know she always supports and endorses me. 

She is my reliable supporter.

>> CORRECT!

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