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Q:Can you think of a device that makes people's lives easier?
A:I can think of device that cleans home and wash dishes or do other house chores.
First, I think many people think house chores is annoying thing, so if there is device that do house chores then people's lives will be easier.
Second, if there is device that do house chores, then people can do another thing when they should have been doing their house chores.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I can think of device that cleans home and wash dishes or do other house chores.

>> I can think of a device that cleans homes, washes dishes, or does other house chores.
First, I think many people think house chores is annoying thing, so if there is device that do house chores then people's lives will be easier.

>> I think a lot of people think house chores are annoying, so if there is a device that does house chores then people's lives will be easier.
Second, if there is device that do house chores, then people can do another thing when they should have been doing their house chores.

>> If there is a device that does house chores, then people can do other things when they should have been doing their house chores.

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