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What do you think should the government about the homeless people on the streets?

작성자: 류*주
2021-08-06 491

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In my country, Korea, there are very few homeless people in the streets, and I've never seen homeless people in Korea.
But if there are a lot of homeless people in the streets, I think the goverment have to educate them.
They can't earn the money because they don't ahve any chance about getting job or earning money.
And the reason that they can't get the chance is they don't know any knowledge or technologies.
And if they want to learn those kinds of studies or skills, they have to learn about it.
But they don't have any money, so they can't learn any studies or skills that can make them to get the chance.
So I think if goverment educate them or give a chance that can study something, they will be able to do something or get a job.

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Hi John! ^^

There’s never a good time to lack shelter, but the return of cold weather presents particular challenges for people experiencing homelessness. The sight of someone on the street in fall and winter compels us to make an effort to help. But it can be difficult to know how to make the greatest impact. Your suggestion is great!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my country, Korea, there are very few homeless people in the streets, and I've never seen homeless people in Korea.
>> In my country, Korea, there are a few homeless people on the streets. I actually have never seen homeless people here. 

But if there are a lot of homeless people in the streets, I think the goverment have to educate them.
>> But if there was, I think the government should educate them. 

They can't earn the money because they don't ahve any chance about getting job or earning money.
They can't earn the money because they don't have any chance to get a job or earn money. 00

And the reason that they can't get the chance is they don't know any knowledge or technologies.
>> The reason why they can't get a job is because they don't have enough knowledge  nor have any technologies. 

And if they want to learn those kinds of studies or skills, they have to learn about it.
>> If they want to learn these skills, they have to study it. 

But they don't have any money, so they can't learn any studies or skills that can make them to get the chance.
>> They might not have any money so they might not be able to do so. 

So I think if goverment educate them or give a chance that can study something, they will be able to do something or get a job.
>> So I think the government should educate them or give them a chance to study. 
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