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What country do you want to visit after COVID 19?

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My husband and I really love to travel other countries. We traveled Japan, Thailand, Italy, France, Germany, Switzerland, Vietnam, Philippines, Taiwan, Mongolia, China and Macao. We are eager to trip to somewhere soon. We are considering two countries to visit after COVID 19. They are Laos and Singapore.

If Corona Pandemic is terminated in winter, we'd like to visit Laos which is one of the best countries to travel from December to January. Laos is a communist country so we will probably use a package trip because of safety problem.

If Corona Pandemic is finished in summer, we will trip to Singapore. In that case, we will go on a backpack tour. We think Singapore is a safe country and we can handle all itineraries by ourselves. Anyway I really hope Corona Pandemic is terminated as soon as possible.

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Hello there Ms. Joshua!

It seems that you have already travelled half of the world with the roster of countries listed below that you have been to. We are all hopeful that the pandemic will soon be gone and we could all be out there travelling places we have never been, experiencing different cultures, and eating sumptuous food.

Here on your essay you have displayed keen grammar mastery. Moreover, your exposition was clear and systematic.

Thank you for sending me this excellently composed short essay. I look forward to reading more from you in the next coming days. For now, I wish you a cool and happy weekend!

See you soon! 

-T. Donna =)

My husband and I really love to travel other countries. 
>> Correct!

We traveled Japan, Thailand, Italy, France, Germany, Switzerland, Vietnam, Philippines, Taiwan, Mongolia, China and Macao. 
>> Correct!

We are eager to trip to somewhere soon.
>>  We are eager to on a trip somewhere soon.

We are considering two countries to visit after COVID 19. 
>> Correct!

They are Laos and Singapore.
>>  Correct!

If Corona Pandemic is terminated in winter, we'd like to visit Laos which is one of the best countries to travel from December to January. 
>> Correct!

Laos is a communist country so we will probably use a package trip because of safety problem.
>> Correct!
Or: ...because of safety problems.

If Corona Pandemic is finished in summer, we will trip to Singapore. 
>> If Corona Pandemic is finished in summer, we will go on a trip to Singapore. 
Or: If Corona Pandemic is finished in summer, we will go to Singapore. 

In that case, we will go on a backpack tour. 
>> Correct!

We think Singapore is a safe country and we can handle all itineraries by ourselves. 
>> Correct!

Anyway I really hope Corona Pandemic is terminated as soon as possible.
>> Correct!
Or: Anyway I really hope the Corona Pandemic will be over as soon as possible.
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