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The reason why I think culture is important

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Culture is the characteristics and knowledge of particular group of people. It usually includes customs, arts, social institutions and people etc. It means the culture of one country represents its people¡¯s way of living. Culture shows how people live and think in a big frame. In other words, people in different culture think differently. As you know, difference can lead to misunderstanding, the main reason of a quarrel. That¡¯s the point that the cultures is important to human. We have to try to know about and understand other cultures. There are many cases that the things which were hard to understand at first finally become understandable after considering the whole situation and the details. I think that kind of circumstances is similar to a ¡®culture¡¯, which largely contributes to make our viewpoints.

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Well done Su Jin! I agree that cultures have brought us together and apart at the same time. There are a few grammar mistakes, which can be easily corrected. Overall, I think you were able to make your reader understand your thoughts and opinions. Great work!

- Teacher Ivy :)

 

Culture is the characteristics and knowledge of particular group of people.

>> Culture is the characteristic and knowledge of a particular group of people.

It usually includes customs, arts, social institutions and people etc.

>> Correct

It means the culture of one country represents its people¡¯s way of living.

>> Correct.

Culture shows how people live and think in a big frame.

>> Correct

>> or, Culture shows how people live and think in a bigger picture.

In other words, people in different culture think differently.

>> In other words, people in different cultures think differently.

As you know, difference can lead to misunderstanding, the main reason of a quarrel.

>> Correct

That¡¯s the point that the cultures is important to human.

>> That¡¯s the reason why culture is important to us, humans.

We have to try to know about and understand other cultures.

>> We have to try to know and understand other cultures.

There are many cases that the things which were hard to understand at first finally become understandable after considering the whole situation and the details.

>> There are a lot of instances where we understand something we didn¡¯t at first because we consider the whole situation and its details.

I think that kind of circumstances is similar to a ¡®culture¡¯, which largely contributes to make our viewpoints.

>> I think that kind of circumstance is similar to our cultures, which largely contributes to our viewpoints.

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