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What are your strengths to be able to enter the international exchange student program?

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I can easily hang out with many people. I can start to talk with anyone.
I have big reaction and always smile. So many people feel comfortable with me.
another strength is large energy.
Close friends said ¡°I can not live like you. You always look like to do somethings¡±
Really, I had many responsibilities since I was young. I led many contest team, some clubs, and classmates.
I love to challenge. I¡¯m nervous when I start it, So I try to do my best.
The best effort is most important to me.
I want to meet many challenges in overseas. I assure do my best anything which I will face abroad.

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* please let me know what contents are needed and omit.

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Hello Kang Hyeon!

Thank you so much for sending me this answer! Now I know more about your strengths. I can see here that you are a born leader who knows what you are doing. Evidently on your script, you are always ready and eager to learn. 

Below are some of my suggestions to make some of your sentences even more organized. As you can see, you have so many correct sentences already and that is very good!

I hope to see you again here on the composition page and read more answers from you.

See you then!

-T. Donna =)

I can easily hang out with many people. I can start to talk with anyone.
>> Correct!

I have big reaction and always smile. So many people feel comfortable with me.
>> Correct!

another strength is large energy.
>> My other strength is my great energy.

Close friends said ¡°I can not live like you. You always look like to do somethings¡±
>> My close friends said, ¡°I can not live like you. You always look like you like to do somethings.¡±

Really, I had many responsibilities since I was young. I led many contest team, some clubs, and classmates.
>> Correct!
OR: I lead many contest teams.

I love to challenge. I¡¯m nervous when I start it, So I try to do my best.
>> Correct!
Or: I love to be challenged. (This means they will challenge you. If you say: "I love to challenge.", this means you will challenge them. )

The best effort is most important to me.
>> Correct!
Or: Putting the best effort is the most important to me.

I want to meet many challenges in overseas. I assure do my best anything which I will face abroad.
>> I want to meet many challenges overseas. I assure you that I will do my best in anything which I will face abroad.

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