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I think we need devices that can record our memories. Because we forget our memories easily. So if we have the device, we can remind happiness and we can motivated.

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Hi Yun! ^^

Over the years, technology has revolutionized our world and daily lives. Additionally, technology for seniors has created amazing tools and resources, putting useful information at our fingertips. Modern technology has paved the way for multi-functional devices like the smartwatch and the smartphone. Computers are increasingly faster, more portable, and higher-powered than ever before. With all of these revolutions, technology has also made our lives easier, faster, better, and more fun. 

Your suggestion is actually a good choice. :)

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I think we need devices that can record our memories. Because we forget our memories easily. 
>>I think we need devices that can record our memories because we forget about those easily. 

So if we have the device, we can remind happiness and we can motivated.
>> So if we have the device, we can remind ourselves with happiness and we can be motivated.

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