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Metropolia university is the biggest university of applied sciences in Finland,
so It¡¯s students can learn a variety of subjects. Environment engineering is complicated major for earth, so to be an experts of my major, l need to study widely.
Metropolia university is located in Helsinki, Finland.
Finland is eco-friendly nation, and Helsinki is best environment city. It is trying to do sustainable developments. Sustainable future is the university¡¯s motive too. there are many place for that, and the citizens have eco- friendly life too. The students can learn many subjects about sustainable developments.
I need to learn this life style and knowledge to be an expert about environment engineering.

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Hi Kang!

Kindly read the suggested corrections and if you have questions, let me know in class. Good luck in your practice! ^^


-T. Maine   


Metropolia university is the biggest university of applied sciences in Finland,
so It¡¯s students can learn a variety of subjects.

>>Metropolia University is the biggest university of applied sciences in Finland, so its students can learn various subjects.

Environment engineering is complicated major for earth, so to be an experts of my major, l need to study widely.

>>Environmental engineering is a complicated major studying about the earth, so I have to widen my study to be considered an expert and a professional in this field.
 Metropolia university is located in Helsinki, Finland.

>>Correct.
 Finland is eco-friendly nation, and Helsinki is best environment city.

>>Finland is an eco-friendly nation and Helsinki has the best environmental city.

It is trying to do sustainable developments.

>>It is still in the process of having sustainable developments.

Sustainable future is the university¡¯s motive too.

>>Having a sustainable future is the university's vision, too.

there are many place for that, and the citizens have eco- friendly life too.

>>Most of the places are eco-friendly. (I think it is better to delete this part.)

 The students can learn many subjects about sustainable developments.

>>The students are taught subjects about sustainabiliy.
 I need to learn this life style and knowledge to be an expert about environment engineering.

>>I am eager to increase my knowledge in this country with my chosen major.









 *please let me know what contents are needed and omit. I want to make more fluently each sentence.
*I don't know how to write conclude sentences.




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