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I wanted to wear fashionable clothes when I was teenagers. There were trendy fashion brands such as Calvin Klein, Guess and Levis. Most students saved money for buying brand clothes because they wanted to be looked hansom from the opposite sex. However, there were negative effect caused by these trends that people considered that the most expensive clothes were the best and the most fashionable items. They didn't think that unique ones were good on them because of the reason above. Koreans would like to follow same things which most people do on fashion, make up and hair style. We don't want to be unique because they are more like be bullied from their friend due to the difference of individuality. These trends have been lasted until now. Teenagers asked their parents to buy expensive outers for them although, they know that these are not beautiful and fashionable items. I guess that they would like to show off their family's ability. I agree people to buy clothes which make them uniqu

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I wanted to wear fashionable clothes when I was a teenager.
>>> CORRECT
 There were trendy fashion brands such as Calvin Klein, Guess and Levis.
>>> CORRECT
 Most students saved money for buying brand clothes because they wanted to be looked hansom from the opposite sex. 
>>>  Most students saved money to buy branded clothes because they wanted to look handsome (attractive) from the opposite sex. 
However, there were negative effects caused by these trends that people considered that the most expensive clothes were the best and the most fashionable items.
>>> CORRECT
 They didn't think that unique ones were good on them because of the reason above.
>>> CORRECT
 Koreans would like to follow the same things which most people do on fashion, make up and hairstyle. 
>>> CORRECT
We don't want to be unique because they are more like be bullied from their friend due to the difference of individuality. 
>>> We don't want to be unique because they are more likely to be bullied from their friend due to individual differences.
These trends have been lasted until now. 
>>> These trends have been lasting until now. 
Teenagers asked their parents to buy expensive outers for them although, they know that these are not beautiful and fashionable items.
>>> Teenagers asked their parents to buy expensive out wear for them although, they know that these are not beautiful and fashionable items.
 I guess that they would like to show off their family's ability. 
>>> CORRECT
I agree people to buy clothes which make them uniqu
>>> I agree with people who buy clothes which make them unique.
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