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Hello Sharon I'm sorry I sent u the assignment late

Before checking my assignment, can you please check my questions

Question

Yesterday, I used the sentences that were " I don't have some plans"

But you gave me some feedback that were "I haven't made a decision"

Why did you give some feedback like that?

Assignment

I like watching mysteries Youtube

For example, It's about illuminatus, sector 51

I think some of these exaggerated

But it's really interesting

If you have extra time

I recommend those things!!

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Hi Seong Hyeon!
Thank you for your question.
The correction is because the second sentence was more specific.
You were talking about what to buy with your birthday money.
It mans there are choices that you have to make.
That's why the word "decision" is better than "plans."
We can discuss it more in class if you want.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I like watching mysteries Youtube
>> I like watching mysteries on YouTube.
For example, It's about illuminatus, sector 51
>> For example, there's something about illuminatus, sector 51.
I think some of these exaggerated
>> I think some of those are exaggerated.
But it's really interesting
>> However, it's really interesting.
If you have extra time, I recommend those things!!
>> Correct
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