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I don't think piano learning is important. The reason is that it is unnecessary time for people who are not interesed
in the piano.

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Hi Yubi! ^^

Learning to play an instrument can help your child fine-tune her ear and enhance skills needed for education and social interaction. It develops physical skills. It also cultivates social skills. It refines discipline and patience. By learning about and playing a variety of instruments, kids can discover how music plays a critical role in other cultures. It has many benefits. :) Although it should be a personal choice and not mandatory. 

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I don't think piano learning is important. 
>>I don't think learning how to play the piano is important. 

The reason is that it is unnecessary time for people who are not interesed in the piano.
>>The reason is that it is unnecessary time for people who are not interested in playing the piano. 

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