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Do you think going to different academies is important for student\'s learning? Why or why not?

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I think going to different academies is not that important for student's learning.
In this world, there are a lot of great men and a lot of great men didn't go to the school or different academies.
But the great men or a lot of scientists succeeded and it is proving that academy is not a necessary thing for a succeeding.
And the great men are humans same as us so we can succeed or do something like the great men or great scientists.
So In my opinion, I think going to different academies is not that important for student's learning.

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Hi John! ^^

I think this is beneficial for students in terms of preparing for the universities that they are gonna go to in the future. But this can also lessen the time to enjoy you childhood since you would be studying most of the time. It has both advantages and disadvantages. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think going to different academies is not that important for student's learning.
>> CORRECT

In this world, there are a lot of great men and a lot of great men didn't go to the school or different academies.
>> In this world, there are a lot of great men who didn't go to school or different academies.

But the great men or a lot of scientists succeeded and it is proving that academy is not a necessary thing for a succeeding.
>>Although a lot of great men and scientist succeed because they went to academies but still, it is not necessary to succeed. 

And the great men are humans same as us so we can succeed or do something like the great men or great scientists.
>>Great men and women are also humans. We can also do what they can do to succeed. 

So In my opinion, I think going to different academies is not that important for student's learning.
>> So in my opinion, I think going to different academies is not that important for student's learning.

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