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There are so many pretty uniforms that I want to draw!

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First of all, in my personal opinion, the school that are famous for having the prettiest school uniforms in Korea are Seoul Performing Arts High School and Hanlim Entertainment Arts High School. At Seoul Performing Arts High School, the clothes are pretty and skirt length is just right. However, it may not look pretty because it is too yellow... In terms of the color of the clothes, from Hanlim Arts High School are the most appropriate. It's a bit burdensome because the skirt length is too short..^^;; (School uniforms also have their own strength and weaknesses ^^) For reference, Hanlim High School and Seoul Arts High School feature many idols and celebrities! I can't draw it myself because I have to attach a picture. So, I prepare the most similar high school uniform! Just change the top jacket to black at Seoul Performing Arts High School..That's done...^^;;

P.S. The two picture in the top is Seoul Performing Arts High School, and the last one is Hanlim High School.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Maria!

These school uniforms are very cool and fashionable! I think that you will look good in any of them. However, you have your own and I hope that they are comfortable to wear in the first place. The purpose of the school uniform is to get you identified to the school where you study. If you are proud of your school, wear your uniform  with pride too!

These photos are like fashion shots. Thank you for your great effort to look for them, upload, and write about them. Excellent job!

See you next week!

-T. Donna =)

First of all, in my personal opinion, the school that are famous for having the prettiest school uniforms in Korea are Seoul Performing Arts High School and Hanlim Entertainment Arts High School. 
>> Correct!
OR: ... the schools that are famous for...

At Seoul Performing Arts High School, the clothes are pretty and skirt length is just right. 
>> Correct!

However, it may not look pretty because it is too yellow... In terms of the color of the clothes, from Hanlim Arts High School are the most appropriate. 
>> Correct!

It's a bit burdensome because the skirt length is too short..^^;; (School uniforms also have their own strength and weaknesses ^^) 
>> Correct!
Or: ...their own strengths and weaknesses...

For reference, Hanlim High School and Seoul Arts High School feature many idols and celebrities! 
>> Correct!

I can't draw it myself because I have to attach a picture. So, I prepare the most similar high school uniform! Just change the top jacket to black at Seoul Performing Arts High School..That's done...^^;;
>> I can't draw it myself so I have to attach a picture. So, I prepared the most similar high school uniforms! Just change the top jacket to black at Seoul Performing Arts High School and that's done.

P.S. The two picture in the top is Seoul Performing Arts High School, and the last one is Hanlim High School.
>> P.S. The two pictures on the top are Seoul Performing Arts High School and the last one is Hanlim High School.
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