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Do you think going to different academies is important for student\'s learning? Why or why not?

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Yes, of course. Because students can learn somethings with a high hand at least. And they can have comfort to go to academies.

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Hi Yun! ^^

I think this is beneficial for students in terms of preparing for the universities that they are gonna go to in the future. But this can also lessen the time to enjoy you childhood since you would be studying most of the time. It has both advantages and disadvantages. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Yes, of course. Because students can learn somethings with a high hand at least. 
>> Yes, of course because students can learn with a high hand with this. 

And they can have comfort to go to academies.
>> They can feel more confident when they go to academies. 
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