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Do you think going to different academies is important for student\'s learning? Why or why not?

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Do you think going to different academies is important for student's learning? Why or why not?

The zeal for student's education in Korea is quite high.
So, many students study to the academies after schoolwork.
That's why students don't spend much time in schoolwork.
They think that academy class is the most important.
It has a negarive influence about academcy class.

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Hi Monica! ^^

I think this is beneficial for students in terms of preparing for the universities that they are gonna go to in the future. But this can also lessen the time to enjoy you childhood since you would be studying most of the time. It has both advantages and disadvantages. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The zeal for student's education in Korea is quite high.
>> CORRECT

So, many students study to the academies after schoolwork.
>> So, many students study in academies after school.

That's why students don't spend much time in schoolwork.
>> CORRECT

They think that academy class is the most important.
>> CORRECT

It has a negarive influence about academcy class
>> It has some negative influences to the students. 
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