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What kind of device should be invented in order for our lives to become easier and convenient?

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I think it will be clear to be convenient if teleport is invented. Because, if it is invented, people can move anywhere without suffering such as traffic jam.

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Hi Seong! ^^

Over the years, technology has revolutionized our world and daily lives. Additionally, technology for seniors has created amazing tools and resources, putting useful information at our fingertips. Modern technology has paved the way for multi-functional devices like the smartwatch and the smartphone. Computers are increasingly faster, more portable, and higher-powered than ever before. With all of these revolutions, technology has also made our lives easier, faster, better, and more fun. 

Your suggestion is actually a good choice. :)

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I think it will be clear to be convenient if teleport is invented. 
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Because, if it is invented, people can move anywhere without suffering such as traffic jam.
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