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If it was your birthday, what gift do you want to receive and why?

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I want to receive buds (wireless earphones) of right side. Because, I recently lost my right side buds. So, I am just listening to music only using left side of buds.

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Hi Seong! ^^

When we celebrate someone's birthday we're not only celebrating the length of their life, but we celebrate how much they've grown in the past year. Birthdays are important because they give everyone a day to feel special and see how much those around them love them. Gifts are essential parts of birthdays. :) 

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I want to receive buds (wireless earphones) of right side. 
>>I want to receive buds (wireless earphones) for my right side. 

Because, I recently lost my right side buds. 
>> It's because I recently lost the right side of my buds. 

So, I am just listening to music only using left side of buds.
>> So, I am just listening to music only using the left side of the buds.

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