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What is your idea of a perfect vacation? Kindly explain it.

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My idea of a perfect vacation is not traveling alone and going to the place that I want to go and I can rest.
If I just travel somewhere alone, I can't enjoy my travel and it is hard to share my experience about the travel.
And if I go to the place that I want, I can learn something in there more easly and I can feel a lot of happiness.
Also if I go to somewhere that I can rest as travel, I can blow the all stresses so it will be cool to me.
That's why I think a perfect vacation is not traveling alone and going to the place that I want to go and I can rest.

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Hi John! ^^

Perfect vacation is from where you get energy to burn fuel after coming back, from where you have memories to cherish later when you are down, from where you can get to do what you like with no time limit. Good choice! :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My idea of a perfect vacation is not traveling alone and going to the place that I want to go and I can rest.
>> My idea of a perfect vacation is traveling with someone or going to a place that I want to go where I can rest.

If I just travel somewhere alone, I can't enjoy my travel and it is hard to share my experience about the travel.
>> If I just travel somewhere alone, I won't enjoy my trip and it is hard to share my experience. 

And if I go to the place that I want, I can learn something in there more easly and I can feel a lot of happiness.
>> And if I go to the place that I want, I can learn something n there more easily and I can feel a lot of happiness.

Also if I go to somewhere that I can rest as travel, I can blow the all stresses so it will be cool to me.
>> Also, if I go to somewhere that I can rest as I travel, it can blow the all stresses so I will feel relaxed. 

That's why I think a perfect vacation is not traveling alone and going to the place that I want to go and I can rest.
>> That's why I think that a perfect vacation is traveling someone or going to the place that I want to go where I can rest.

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