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Michael said, we just want to decorate ourselves more, and we don't want to wear uncomfortable uniforms. However, showing their individuality, want to wear, decorating, and doing whatever they want are all things that can do when we become as an adult. Even if you show your individuality and decorate to your heart¡¯s content, only your friends will recognize you. Teachers, parents, and the adults around me all seem to look after me, but no one seem to like it. Of course, it cannot be that showing individuality is a bad thing. It's because there aren't only people who are bad for showing their individuality. However, if the word showing this individuality interferes with your studies and disturbs your school life, I don't think it will be appreciated.

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Hi there Maria!

Thank you for recasting the thoughts of Michael. Showing your individuality or your own 'style' definitely can be done once you become older. For now, while being young, enjoy first wearing the uniform that all of your friends are also wearing because someday, you will miss wearing it.

A job well done here on your homework, keep it up!

-T. Donna =)

Michael said, we just want to decorate ourselves more, and we don't want to wear uncomfortable uniforms. 
>> Correct!

However, showing their individuality, want to wear, decorating, and doing whatever they want are all things that can do when we become as an adult. 
>> However, showing their individuality, wanting to wear, decorating, and doing whatever they want are all things that can be done when they become an adult. 

Even if you show your individuality and decorate to your heart¡¯s content, only your friends will recognize you. 
>> Correct!

Teachers, parents, and the adults around me all seem to look after me, but no one seem to like it. 
>> Correct!

Of course, it cannot be that showing individuality is a bad thing. 
>> Correct!

It's because there aren't only people who are bad for showing their individuality. 
>> It's because there aren't only people who are bad at showing their individuality.  

However, if the word showing this individuality interferes with your studies and disturbs your school life, I don't think it will be appreciated.
>> However, if the world showing this individuality interferes with your studies and disturbs your school life, I don't think it will be appreciated.
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